114 Winner Karytzzia I was with my sister in a haunted house, I was scared. I started hearing sounds in the house, Then I saw a shadow in the hallway. I stared into the hallway. Suddenly, it disappeared into the wall, I freaked out. I was so scared but as it disappeared I ran out with my sister, she was really red. I walked slowly inside the house but then the shadow appeared but this time it was in the stairs, it was looking at me. It was a woman. She was really pale and was wearing a white dress. Who was she? | 112 Winner Andrew My sisters and I went to Six Flags on Halloween and it was scary because people are chasing you when you least expect it and it is scary. I went on ride and it went really high in the air and then all of sudden you fall I felt like had a heart attack. After that it didn’t get any better I was getting chased by a clown. Then suddenly, he disappeared I was freaking out because I knew he was going to pop up all of a sudden. He wasn’t seen after that. We were scared the whole day. | 110 Winner Ebony It was a stormy day and it was Abigail’s first time alone at home. She started to hear people whisper, “Come play with us.” Abigail ran to her room and hid in her closet and heard the voice again. Suddenly, she disappeared. She was in a big purple house. All that was there were twins. The twins asked “Do you want to play with us?” Right away Abigail replied “No!” The twins started chasing Abigail. She hid under their bed. It was a bad idea. “You will be our eternal playmate!” The twins told Abigail. Abigail was never seen again. |
36 Comments
Andrea Padilla
12/15/2016 07:59:30 am
I really liked ebony's story because it says that the girl was never seen again and it is so interesting and mysterious
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Ms. Doyle
12/15/2016 09:14:10 am
I agree with you Andrea! That ending was very mysterious. It made me shutter in suspense.
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Pascual Rivas
12/15/2016 08:00:11 am
I love karytzzia"s story because it has a lot of detail and sounds really good.
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Jair Gomez
12/15/2016 08:00:34 am
I like yours Andrew it was a really good story and it was scary.
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Andrew perez
12/15/2016 09:23:54 am
thx
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Mya Ortiz
12/15/2016 11:42:40 am
I like that you added details about when you and your sister went to six flags and people were chasing after you.
DEREEEEEK
12/15/2016 12:09:10 pm
nice story andrew it has a big trend about clowns
Joseph
12/15/2016 12:35:22 pm
I agree with Jair because it was a good story and I liked the part with the clown
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alexander balderrama
12/15/2016 08:06:23 am
I like the way that you told us the girls name and how you said she vanished
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Karytzzia Martinez
12/15/2016 08:27:48 am
I really like Ebony's story, I like that you have a lot of details and I like the way you used a person name so it will get the feels.
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Yadira
12/15/2016 08:47:40 am
I love Karytzzia's story because it made me feel like I was in the haunted house!! You go sister!! <3
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Karytzzia
12/15/2016 08:57:13 am
Thx
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Leonel Calderon
12/15/2016 08:52:06 am
I liked all of them because I loved how they all but I liked karytzzias story because it had lots of action.
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Eric
12/15/2016 08:53:58 am
I loved karytzzia because it is so scary and it is so creative
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Aaliyah jimenez
12/15/2016 08:55:08 am
i love karytzzia she has a lot's of details !!!! and she add her sister
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Sheccid
12/15/2016 08:57:32 am
I like your story because you have a lot of detail and it was interasting
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Alondra Estrada
12/15/2016 08:59:53 am
Hi Karry, I just want to say that your story is very cool and amazing.
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Lisseth
12/15/2016 09:00:33 am
I like how Ebony put "She was never heard of again' it added a lot of suspence.
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12/15/2016 09:01:08 am
I really like Karytzzia's because first I like the action in it and my really favorite part of is who is that person is she a ghost I don't know?
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Miledi Contreras
12/15/2016 09:32:38 am
I ;like how every one put a scary story but i will choose...
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Natalia
12/15/2016 09:37:24 am
I like Andrew because there is a clown in it and it happens in life sometimes..
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Natalia Tapia
12/15/2016 10:53:49 am
I like Ebony's story because it leaves a mysterious cliffhanger for example Abigail disappeared what happened when the twins found Abigail?
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Orlando Gamino
12/15/2016 10:56:12 am
I liked Ebony's story because it was the most scariest.
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Edwin Andrade
12/15/2016 11:00:09 am
I liked Ebony because at the end there is many suspense that made me get in the story more deeply.
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Carolina Ramirez
12/15/2016 11:00:48 am
I like Ebony's story because I like how she made her story scary. Also, I like how Ebony added at the end that Abigail was never seen again.
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Ozfari Solis
12/15/2016 11:09:39 am
I love Karytzzia´s story so much
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Guadalupe Andrade
12/15/2016 11:14:06 am
I like Ebony's story because the ending was interesting and I wonder if Abigail will ever seen again?
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Jairo
12/15/2016 11:17:50 am
I liked Andrews because It was scary because you don't know were he's going to show up.
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Jonas castillo
12/15/2016 11:19:18 am
your story was scary and creative.
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Estefany Garcia
12/15/2016 11:20:37 am
I liked every ones story because they all had a lot of detail, and they were all very interesting.
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Aaron
12/15/2016 11:52:40 am
I like all the story because they have so much details in the stories
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Fernando Camacho
12/15/2016 11:54:51 am
I like ebony's story because she put a lot of detail in one short story. I also liked the part where there was twins.
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Angela
12/15/2016 12:07:49 pm
I like Karitzzias because it is interisting and ended on a cliff hanger.
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