I was watching TV at midnight. A couple moments later, I heard a sound. I was kind of scared, because I didn't know what it was. I thought if I hear it again, then I will go check it out to makes sure it wasn't an intruder. Five minutes later, I hear it again. Thud!! I look around in the room, nothing. There was no one in the kitchen either. I was worried. I was shaking. Thud! Clang! It was getting louder. I was walking further into the deep dark house. And then I saw a bright light, I don't remember anyone turning on any lights though. I go into the room; it was my cat, playing with a candle.
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9/22/2013 12:31:04 am
Hi Ania, you've worked really hard on this 100WC. I like how you have built up the suspense by using short sentences. Your time connectives at the start of the sentences gives us more detail too, which is great. Next time, try to stay in the same tense all the way through - some of the time you are writing in the past and some of the time in the present. It can get a little bit confusing. Keep up the good work Ania and I look forward to reading some more from you in the future.
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